The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#enquiries #tourist #information #office #city #period #features #comparisons

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The graph illustrates the

enquires

Replace the word

enquiries

show examples

recieved

Correct your spelling

received

, categorized into three groups, in

person

Use synonyms

letter

Change preposition

by letter

show examples

and email, and

telephone

Change preposition

by telephone

show examples

, by the tourist information

center

Change the spelling

centre

show examples

over

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

6 months in one city in 2011.

Overall

Linking Words

, by the first

glase

Correct your spelling

glance

, it becomes clear that,

while

Linking Words

Add a hyphen

in-person

show examples

person

Use synonyms

and

by telephone

Add a hyphen

by-telephone

show examples

trends experienced an upward increase,

by letter

Add a hyphen

by-letter

show examples

and email

trend

Fix the agreement mistake

trends

show examples

decresed

Correct your spelling

decreased

over

these mentioned

Change the determiner

this mentioned period

these mentioned periods

show examples

period

Use synonyms

Moreover

Linking Words

Change preposition

apply

show examples

person

Use synonyms

enquires

Replace the word

enquiries

show examples

recieved

Correct your spelling

received

had the highest number of

totall

Correct your spelling

total

totally

by the end of the

period

Use synonyms

. First of all,

while

Linking Words

person

Use synonyms

trend started at a bit of 400 requires

recieved

Correct your spelling

received

Change preposition

show examples

jun, by a swar increase, riching more than 1800

numbers

Use synonyms

Change preposition

show examples

jun.

In contrast

Linking Words

Change preposition

apply

show examples

letter and email requires

recieved

Correct your spelling

received

started at approximately 800

numbers

Use synonyms

jan

Capitalize the word

Jan

show examples

, remaining steadily until

march

Capitalize word

March

show examples

then

Linking Words

by a gradual decline, hitting a low of nearly 400

numbers

Use synonyms

Change preposition

show examples

may

Capitalize word

May

show examples

,staying steadily by the end of

Use synonyms

period

Add an article

the period

show examples

Conversely

Linking Words

although

Linking Words

, by telephone enquired

recieved

Correct your spelling

received

experienced a

flactuate

Correct your spelling

fluctuate

trend during

this

Linking Words

period

Use synonyms

, starting at almost 900

numbers

Use synonyms

then

Linking Words

reaching a top of nearly 1900

numbers

Use synonyms

on jun.

Submitted by mahanz on Mon Dec 30 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

▼

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words person, period, numbers with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

▼

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

173 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

number of inquiries
Tourist Information Office
six-month period
increased steadily
reached a peak
decreased slightly
increased dramatically
experienced a gradual decline
general trend
highest number
lowest number
significant increase
tourism interest

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

8
band
There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: Say what would you do differently than last year Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.
I hope this message finds you all well! We're getting ready for our annual work party next month, so I wanted to talk about how we're planning it and give you some ideas for how to make it even better this year.
6.5
band
Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people say parents should teach kids how to be good people. Others think schools should do it. I believe it's the parents' job to teach their kids this.
4
band
You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. State what your skills and experience are. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam
Firstly, i want t introduce myself before i apply to join this volunteer. My name is Dewi Saputri, usually people call me Dewi. I am 22 years old, and now i am in the 3rd year studying in the university and my major is english education. According the announcement that i got, i have read that your company open the recruitments for the volunteer about the expedition of the culture. Through this letter i would like to apply that i want to join and be the part of this program. The main reasons that i want to join this program because i want to be a person who can spread the benefits for peolpe around me. Then, i have many experiences about the voluntary, the one of this experience is when i was joining kampus mengajar program. I joined kampus mengajar program for 4 months which the location is far from my domicile. Since i joined, i have made many things which can gave positive impact for people around me. These impacts such as, me and my team helped students to increase their numeracy...
8.5
band
A young person will start work at your office next month to gain work experience. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter ▪️Inform him/her about the work that needs to be done at the office; ▪️Explain what he/she is supposed to do on the first day; ▪️Suggest what he/she should bring to work
I found out that after considering several options for your Internship, you have decided to choose my company. However, I must give you a piece of information about my workplace before you resume.
4.5
band
📝 Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Caring of children is believed to be an essential job in any society, because every human should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents to some extent. I agree with this opinion.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

📝 Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?