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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information and make a comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information and make a comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar and line chart compares data about how much money and the average spending that American families invested in 3 various sectors namely,
food
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, gas, and clothing from
January
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 to April of 2010.
Overall
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, it was important that the trends of clothing and gas
in contrast
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 to
food
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 and average increased over the period of 3 months.
According to
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 the diagram, the line of average hit roughly 350 in
January
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;
then
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 it was constant until February after that, it rose slightly and touched the vertex at just under 450 in
March
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.
However
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, it declined moderately to approximately 300 in April.
Food
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, the main item that people spent their money on, scored nearly 500 in
January
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. Later it climbed marginally and peaked at almost 450 in
March
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, but it reduced to just over 300 in
March
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. The graph demonstrates that Gas reported nearly 350 in
January
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;
thereafter
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, it dropped to the minimum mark at roughly 250 in February;
nevertheless
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,
,
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 it leapt significantly to just over 550 in April. Clothing scored the same figure on Average;
then
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 it grew considerably to the same number for
food
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 in February;
although
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, it dipped sharply to nearly 300 in
March
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;
then
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 it went up enormously to just under 700 in April.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, january, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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