Some people feel the best way to reduce the number of accidents on the road is to further limit the speed of vehicles. Others think that there are better ways to tackle this issue. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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accidents
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street
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is it the best solution
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others think about
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we will discuss both views.  First of all, as
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sizes increase, the need
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vehicles steadily
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in developed countries suggested
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further
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regulatoins
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regulations
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much as we can reduce the speed that will make drivers more focused on the
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, and other cars, and
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will result in less number of
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accidents
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when the maximum speed
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in the
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is 70,
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mean 50% of the drivers
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speed which will reduce the
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more stressed, we need to reduce
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stress. and one of the best
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the speed of our vehicles, that
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certainly
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, some experts, and former traffic officers think about more developed ideas. Nowadays, we have
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artificial intelligence which makes our
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much easier, we can
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implement
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huge advanced technology to help us
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accidents
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the roads.
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, we can put a small tracker in the
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measuring our performance regarding, speeds, breaks, and even using cell phones. Another great idea is to focus
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reinforcement
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we could not follow each driver we have
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in the cars
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him/her to replace it with
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accidents
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even
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a speed
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than 40 km/hr inside small
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.
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reinforcement
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and for future artificial
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intelligence
providing the traffic sectors with
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precise
numbers and
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statistical
informatoin regading
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information regarding
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behavior
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, we living in
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fast
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world, most
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better except
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road
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the reason behind a lot of
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strategies
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accidents
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some believe
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limit
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speed is the only solution,
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others
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think using advanced technology is the future for reducing the number of
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with positive
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reinforcement
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conclusion
The conclusion summarizes both sides and presents the writer’s own opinion effectively, tying back to the main points discussed in the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proponents
  • averting
  • collisions
  • fatalities
  • awareness
  • infrastructure
  • pedestrian zones
  • distracted driving
  • enforcement
  • penalties
  • compliance
  • culture of road safety
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