The pie charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.

The pie charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.
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The present pie charts and table compare data about the whole number of sources of fish which were transported to the USA in 3 different
years
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(1988, 1992, and 2000).
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, the total value of dollars increased;
moreover
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,
firstly
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, Canada was the main source, but in other
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Others had a large section. The data gave us information that the lowest value happened in 1988 with only 6.57 billion dollars. In the next four
years
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, it was a slight increase of almost 2 billion dollars. The
last
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year reported was in 2000 with a total value of USD 10.72 billion. From the pie charts given, we may conclude that in 1988, the main supporter of importing fish to the US was Canada with 60% of the market share. In the next 6
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, there was a sharply decreasing proportion of Canada's retail percentage to about half before that
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made others the top exporters.
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, in 2000 was still dominated by others
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there was a slight drop in Canadian exchange proportion and quite a positive trend in China's market division of up to 30%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary sources
  • import
  • export
  • sustainable
  • trade
  • volume
  • shifts
  • increase
  • decrease
  • prominent
  • exporters
  • fishery
  • market dynamics
  • trade agreements
  • conservation
  • supply chain
  • trend analysis
  • economic impact
  • fishing industry
  • environmental concerns
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