Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society but nobody has agreed on what an ideal society would look like. What do you think is the most important element needed to make a society perfect? How can the ideal society be achieved?
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mankind,
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society
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and how humanity may achieve it.
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the opportunity
people
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people
treat each other respectfully and they all contribute to the development of their motherland.
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