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All natural resources are limited. It is therefore important that all companies make products that can be used for many years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Making a long-life
product
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 is a good point, but, it depends on what type of
product
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 it is. If, the
product
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 uses natural
resources
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 like
wood
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 and rocks or all others. The company need to invest in research to make their
product
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 of good quality, so people can use it for a long time. As we can see, our natural stuff is decreasing every day. Making
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 products is one of the activities that people can do to help the environment.
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 that, we can do a re-growth campaign for forests as well. There are many supports that we can do to pursue it.
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, Using non-natural
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 is another solution to keep our natural
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. Nowadays, Many researchers think about developing new materials that can replace natural ingredients but in a good way,
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, we often see polymer or resin everywhere. Resin can replace
wood
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 to make a floor or make a fake marble stone for home furniture.
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 polymer can help to reduce
wood
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 usage because we can make fake
wood
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 from it and can used to be a home wall or floor. So in my opinion, I agree that companies need to develop their products so that they will be long-life products. and it will be good if all the companies see other ingredients be solutions for replacing natural sources to keep our environment sustainable,
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,if they can't just do activities to keep the
resources
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 in good quantity and quality.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of your arguments. While your introduction and conclusion are present, ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next and that your ideas are well-connected.
Task Achievement
Clarify and expand on your ideas for better comprehension. Some points are well-made, but they need to be expressed more clearly with richer details or examples.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific or varied examples to strengthen your arguments. Examples should be relevant and directly support the main points you are discussing.
Task Achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to the prompt, addressing the importance of using long-lasting and alternative materials to conserve natural resources.
Coherence & Cohesion
You include an introduction and a solid conclusion, effectively framing your essay's main points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable development
  • Durable goods
  • Product lifecycle
  • Resource conservation
  • Natural resource management
  • Circular economy
  • Consumer loyalty
  • Brand reputation
  • Economic impact
  • Innovative solutions
  • Planned obsolescence
  • Raw material usage
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