In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
Despite the advancement in agricultural technology, many people across the globe still suffer from hunger.
This
phenomenon is caused by low productivity because farmers
cannot afford things to enhance their production
due to
financial issues. In response to this
problem, this
essay proposes the government’s role to interfere and support the local farmer in maximizing the amount of local production
.
Farmers
around the world do not have the same financial ability to afford agricultural supporting goods. This
is to say, some farmers
still use the traditional way to manage their land thus
they can not maximize the result. For example
, some farmers
use fertilizer and insecticides to promote their plants’ growth and to prevent insects from eating their plants. However
, some of them witness financial difficulty in affording these agricultural goods. Thus
their plants cannot optimally grow due to
lack of nutrients and the inteferention of animals. This
causes a lower amount of produce and cannot meet the demands.
The solution to this
problem is to give financial aid, especially the farmers
who have limited funds. The local government can provide cash to them or supply fertilizers and insecticides for those who need them. By doing so, the amount of crops produced by the local farmers
will increase and thus
will able
to meet the market demands. Add a missing verb
be able
For instance
, the municipality of Bantul provided aids
for Fix the agreement mistake
aid
farmers
through supplying free fertilizers in 2021. In the following months, the authorities recorded there was an increase in the local production
of rice.
In conclusion, hunger in many areas can be caused by people’s limited budget which hinders their production
. Therefore
, the authorities’ role in providing aid for them is needed to increase local production
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Task Achievement
To enhance Task Achievement, you need to delve deeper into the problem and offer a more detailed explanation. Focusing on financial difficulty alone is somewhat simplistic; there are other contributing factors such as political instability, war, climate change, distribution issues, and food waste that should be considered. While your essay does address the question, providing a broader range of causes and solutions would demonstrate a more thorough understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've structured your essay with an introduction and a conclusion. However, your ideas are presented in a somewhat disorganized manner. Main points should be separated clearly into paragraphs, and they need to be supported with more specific examples and explanations. Transition words and phrases should be used more effectively to move from one idea to another and to establish clear relationships between them.