The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts a man-made process of producing bricks for the building industry.
Overall
, the cycle consists of 7 stages starting with collecting the raw material and ending up with delivering the product to the consumers.
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, clay Linking Words
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used as a raw material is collected by a special machine Linking Words
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called a digger. Linking Words
Then
, it undergoes grinding. After that, it is placed on a roller from a metal grid. Linking Words
Next,
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material has to be formed. It can be done either with the help of a mould or it can be cut with a wire cutter.
In the middle of the manufacture, bricks are put in a drying oven for 24 or 48 hours. Linking Words
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, the bricks are heated in the kins at high (870-1300 degrees Celsius) or moderate (200-980 degrees Celsius) temperatures. After the completion of heating up, the product is cooled down in a cooling chamber between 48 to 72 hours. Linking Words
Finally
, goods that are ready are proceeded with packaging and Linking Words
then
delivered for construction.Linking Words
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