The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and ,are comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the figures
of
the online shopping Change preposition
for
sales
for retail Use synonyms
sectores
in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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sectors
stores
Overall
, we can see that between both years there have been changes Linking Words
on
the statistics, because over the years the number of clients Change preposition
in
on
film/music and books stores Change preposition
in
have
increased. Change the verb form
has
Also
, but in Linking Words
negative
way, Change the article
a negative
travel
and Use synonyms
clothe
shops have had a decrease Correct subject-verb agreement
clothes
on
Change preposition
in
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
sales
. Use synonyms
In addition
, we can see that in 2003 Linking Words
travel
stores were leading the market, but in 2013 movie/music has taken the lead. Use synonyms
Also
, the other two categories Linking Words
also
invested their Linking Words
sales
percentage between those two years.
The increase and Use synonyms
decreas
Correct your spelling
decrease
of
Change preposition
in
evey cathegory
was: for books, +3%; for film/music, +12%; for clothes, -8%; and for Correct your spelling
every category
travel
, -7%.
After taking all the details, we can conclude that Use synonyms
travel
stores have dominated the market, unlike Use synonyms
clothe
shops that are the ones with the lower percentage of Correct subject-verb agreement
clothes
sales
.Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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