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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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he line chart provides key information about the
numbers
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 of visitors to aThe line chart provides key information about the
numbers
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 of visitors to a Caribbean island throughout the years ranging from 2010 to 2017. The units are measured in
numbers
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the total number of visitors experienced a constant increase to the end of the mentioned period.
In addition
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, tourists' options are diverse between staying on cruise ships and staying on the island.
According to
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 the data shown, individuals who prefer staying on
the
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cruise ships represented less than 0.5 in 2010, but after
that
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 their
numbers
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 started to fluctuate
to
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in
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 2013
,
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 and reached exactly 0.5.
Finally
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, their figures rose constantly until
it
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they
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 reached
the
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 peak at 2
by
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 2017. In terms of the tourists who are keen
in
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 spending their time on the island rather than the cruise ships, they indicated that more than 0.5 in 2010, and their
numbers
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 were growing until the year of 2013 which remained at a modest 1.5 till 2015.
However
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, that stability did not continue and their figures decreased slightly to less than 1.5 in 2016, but by the end of the
interval
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 it returned to 1.5.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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