You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You shou

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Dear Sarah,
Hiw
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How
have you been? I
want
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wanted
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to share
an
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some
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exciting news with you when we
meet
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met
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but we did not get the chance so I am
wrting
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writing
you
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letter. I have recently moved into a new place. my new place is an apartment on the 27th floor. It has a nice view of the beach. My apartment comes with facilities. It has a gym and a
roof top
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swimming pool. How awesome is that especially on a hot day
.
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My flat is only 100m away from a park so I will be able to do daily exercises after work and take my dog on a walk. There are many cafes and restaurants around my area.
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means that it will be very convenient for me to purchase food for my dinner if I were to return home from work late. The best of all is that the supermarkets are within
waling
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distance from my apartment which means easy access to groceries. You could come over anytime you want. I will be happy to show you around my neighbourhood. Just shoot me a text if you are coming over. Hopefully I'll see you soon. Lots of love, Joscelin
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coherence and cohesion
Consider varying the sentence structure and length to create a more engaging rhythm.
task achievement
Proofreading for minor spelling mistakes (e.g., "Hiw" to "How", "wrting" to "writing") can enhance clarity and precision.
task achievement
You provided a complete response to the task by describing the house, neighbourhood, and inviting your friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear and natural flow, thanks to the logical arrangement of points.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly tone, making it suitable for the task of writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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