The given pie charts compare statistics for the yearly expenses of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001

The given pie charts compare statistics for the yearly expenses of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001
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The pie charts compare statistics for the yearly costs of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001. As a general overview, after analyzing the graph, it can be seen that the teacher
salaries
Use synonyms
category
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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predominant in both years
whereas
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insurance was the least with almost
same
Correct article usage
the same
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percentages.
To begin
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with, in 1981, the
teachers
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teacher's
teachers'
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salaries
Use synonyms
in a school
was
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were
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40% with
highest
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the highest
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number
on the contrary
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insurance was 2% with 20 times as much
lesser
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less
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.
Furthermore
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,
bothe
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both
the resources e.g. books and the furniture & equipment categories were
equal
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an equal
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number with 15%.
Lastly
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, the other
workers
Change to a genitive case
worker's
workers'
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salaries
Use synonyms
proportion was 12%
lesser
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less
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than the
teachers
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teacher's
teachers'
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amount. Moving on to 2001,
still
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still,
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teachers were predominant and increased to 50% and
coverred
Correct your spelling
covered
half of the chart.
In addition
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, insurance had
gradual
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gradually
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went
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gone
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up only by 1% yet, it was still the least category among the five others. The two same proportions altered into
like
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apply
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chalk and cheese. The resources flew up to 20%
while
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the
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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significantly decreased to 5%.
Finally
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, the other
workers
Change to a genitive case
worker's
workers'
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salaries
Use synonyms
steadily decreased by 6%.
To sum up
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,
passing
Verb problem
the past
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two decades
had
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have
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expanded in all categories except only furniture expenses which the
reduce
Wrong verb form
reduced
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of total expenses
  • allocation of funds
  • expenditure
  • evolved over time
  • yearly expenses
  • educational resources
  • significant shifts
  • categories of expenses
  • proportional changes
  • span of years
  • budget distribution
  • operational costs
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