The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts a man-made process of recycling aluminium
cans
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.
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, the cycle consists of 7 stages starting with throwing away and collecting and ending with producing new
cans
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. First of all, people throw used
cans
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into special bins where only aluminium can be put.
Next,
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recycling companies collect
this
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rubbish and deliver it to the factories by cars that transfer garbage. There,
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material is cleaned and sorted. After that, it can be shredded and compressed. By
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time former
cans
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are ready for heating and melting. With the help of that,
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mass could be rolled after cooling down. The thickness of the formed rolls is between 2.5 mm to 6 mm.
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, the material may be recycled and reused. Actually, 74% of
cans
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in the UK were made
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way. Those are often used by companies that produce soft drinks.
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, Coca-Cola or Pepsi-Cola usually purchase these
cans
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for their products.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collection phase
  • Recycling facility
  • Cleaning process
  • Contaminants
  • Shredding stage
  • High-temperature furnace
  • Melting process
  • Liquid aluminium
  • Molds
  • Ingot
  • Solidification
  • Aluminium sheets
  • Recycling efficiency
  • Conservation of raw materials
  • Energy conservation
  • Degradation of quality
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