The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts a man-made process of recycling aluminium
cans
.
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Overall
, the cycle consists of 7 stages starting with throwing away and collecting and ending with producing new Linking Words
cans
.
First of all, people throw used Use synonyms
cans
into special bins where only aluminium can be put. Use synonyms
Next,
recycling companies collect Linking Words
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rubbish and deliver it to the factories by cars that transfer garbage. There, Linking Words
this
material is cleaned and sorted. After that, it can be shredded and compressed. By Linking Words
this
time former Linking Words
cans
are ready for heating and melting. With the help of that, Use synonyms
this
mass could be rolled after cooling down. The thickness of the formed rolls is between 2.5 mm to 6 mm.
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Finally
, the material may be recycled and reused. Actually, 74% of Linking Words
cans
in the UK were made Use synonyms
this
way. Those are often used by companies that produce soft drinks. Linking Words
For instance
, Coca-Cola or Pepsi-Cola usually purchase these Linking Words
cans
for their products.Use synonyms
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