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Band 6

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, Request for New accommodation, I am writing regarding
issue
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an issue
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 that I have been facing in my college accommodation. I have been living
at
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in
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 room 231
from
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for
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last
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the last
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one
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year.
However
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,
Last
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 month my old roommate just left and moved to a new apartment. My new subtenant
is
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 just started living here
this
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 month from 1Jan2025.
Although
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, He is really a nice person
but
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I have been having a hard time
in
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living with him.
Firstly
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, He
work
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works
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 overnight from home which
making
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 me hard to fall asleep because of the noise and lights.
Secondly
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, As my classes usually start
from
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 7:00 am in the morning,
consequently
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 I
could
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 not able to focus on my studies due
the
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to the
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luck
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lack
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 of sleep. It would be
appreciable
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 if you
can
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 change my room as soon as possible. I prefer to live alone
this
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 time, so could you please provide me
a
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single room
instead
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in
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of
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a
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sharing. I am willing to pay
extra
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an extra
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 amount for it. Thank you for your attention to
this
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 matter. Kind Regards, Harmanpreet Kaur

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples of how the roommate's schedule affects your studies.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent use of verb tenses throughout the letter to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a clear and logical structure, with separate paragraphs for each main idea.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, suitable for addressing an accommodation officer.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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