In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation ?

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Owning and renting homes in some countries can be a debate of importance between some people which
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, should you buy or rent
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property
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a property
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? In my opinion, buying
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and owning it is very beneficial as the
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can be used as a place to live
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holding on to it as an investment which will continuously appreciate in value. There are
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upsides to purchasing a house if possible
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as the prices of
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will always go up, because of
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, owning
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in the future will be extremely difficult as the cost will end up being unreasonably high.
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to that, the
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can be used as a family
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where our children can grow up and make memories and allows them to have a place to come back to when they are older to look back on their childhood memories and relive their experiences.
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, owning a
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can be rather difficult for some individuals as
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value constantly rises and at the moment is incredibly high making it only available to purchase for the elite with a lot of funds to spare.
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is where renting comes in,
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owning may seem like the better option, it is not possible for everyone and renting gives them the opportunity to live in a desirable
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for a fraction of the price. It can
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be considered for people who easily get bored of their living environments and
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moving a lot as it can be rented out for a specific time period
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, you are not forced to settle on a single spot which
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might enjoy because it allows us to constantly move around and travel more, experiencing newer parts of the world. With all that being said, I do believe that there are both pros and cons to each side but in the end, it all varies between each individual.
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, people end up renting the
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of buying despite it having better
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which can be because of many factors
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as commitment, financial constraints, and personal
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preferences
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decision
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Task Achievement
Clarify the central argument and make it more explicit in the introduction. Are you for or against owning homes universally? Or does it depend on the context and individual?
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Provide more specific examples to clearly support your points. For instance, mention a country or context where buying is particularly beneficial or renting is more common due to economic factors.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure logical progression of ideas within each paragraph, especially when transitioning between the benefits of buying and renting.
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Include more linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of the essay and connect your ideas smoothly.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the issue by discussing the advantages of buying and renting homes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both viewpoints, and concludes with a personal opinion, which provides a complete response format.
Task Achievement
Your essay engages with multiple perspectives which enriches the content and shows an understanding of different individual needs and circumstances.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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