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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph delineates the figures of people who visited three different museums located in London from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
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 , it is evident that there is a singular trend of growth at the National
Gallery
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 , contrasted with a significant decrease in attendance at the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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,
while
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 the
British
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Museum
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lagging
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 behind throughout the period. Starting from 2007 , the number of
individuals
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 who visited the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 peaked at almost under 15 ,
whereas
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 just 7 people visited the National
Gallery
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 and the
British
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Museum
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 witnessed a visit of marginally above 12.In 2008 , the
British
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Museum
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 experienced a noticeable decline to approximately 7 visitors ,
while
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 the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 depicted the same amount of
individuals
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 which is 13 ,
while
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 the National
Gallery
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 had a slight increase reached to 7
individuals
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. From 2010 to 2012 , both the
British
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Museum
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 and the National
Gallery
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 experienced a high increase through the period catapulting to reach 13 and just over 15 , respectively in 2012 and
also
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Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 which rose to just 10
individuals
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 in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, victoria, albert, museum, british, individuals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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