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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chars show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chars show how it was distributed.
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The table and pic charts depict the information on the
police
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 budget for one
areas
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area
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 of Britain for 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is illustrated that
,
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 the revenue for
police
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 from all
the
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apply
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four sources has increased from 2017 to 2018.
Whereas
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,
its
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a
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 major portion of the income was spent on Salaries. In the table, it is evident that revenue from
National
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the National
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 government
was
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doubled as compared to Local Taxes in 2017, with 177.5 million
pound
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pounds
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 and 91.2 million pounds
respectivily
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respectively
.
However
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, it is clear from the table that income from Local Taxes had increased significantly in 2018
while
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the others
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others
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other
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 two sectors had observed minor positive fluctuation. For the pie charts, around 17% of
police
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 income
had
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was
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 spent on Building and transportation for both years.
However
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, the
police
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 had spent around 8% on Technology and 75% on Salaries for 2017.
Therefore
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, In 2018,
expense
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expenses
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 on Technology had
incresed
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increased
 by 8%
while
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expense
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expenses
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 on Salaries
had
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apply
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decreased by 6%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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