Some people believe that education should be free for all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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to study regardless
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background without any
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ideal environment, development and awareness are
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and the rate of
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will decrease,
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there is a common
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belief
that education should be free for all. There is
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an opposing argument. In my opinion, I strongly agree
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that, learning is right for everyone. On one hand, supporting education is essential for a sustainable economy. Learning our children
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not only boosts the national economy but
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helping
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to develop our
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. What I mean is,
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that people
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with skills and knowledge have the ability to improve their nation's infrastructure and transportation system,
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attracting a significant number of tourists.
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, in
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like Saudi Arabia, engineers made many projects in
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as
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building
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buildings
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and introduce
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a huge number of cultures and
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is
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atrract
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attracts
residents and forgine human. Which
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to
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promote
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promoting
state income
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, some schools and
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universities pay
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fee
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or
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for study and
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is
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a consedration
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consedration
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consideration
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challenge
for poverty in our society.
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, the poor dollar could not
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registration
registrations
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their stats.
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, we show
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in
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crime
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the crime
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graph
due to
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a decrease
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decrease
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decreased
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awarness
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awareness
.
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, studies done by
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Cambridge
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unviersty
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university
about
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a substantial
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average
of
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offences
the result show that
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of
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crime
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crimes
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in poor
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countries
are
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more than
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one
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. In conclusion, we could say that
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all members should have
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equal
oppurtinity
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opportunities
to learn without taking on economic or
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conditions and education
have
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has
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many
benificial
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benefits
like
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deterring
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crime
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples that clearly illustrate your points. For instance, when discussing the benefits of education, use specific studies or data to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay is logically structured. Try to make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you transition smoothly between ideas to enhance the flow of your writing.
general
Attend to grammar and spelling errors to enhance clarity. While small inaccuracies won't drastically lower your score, clearer expression will improve your communication.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction sets a positive tone and clearly presents your opinion on the topic.
task achievement
You have made an effort to explore both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced approach in addressing the essay prompt.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your standpoint, making sure your belief is clearly stated.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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