In some states in the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
Accompanying
children
by their Use synonyms
parents
, after Use synonyms
particular
time at Add an article
a particular
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night
improves Add the comma(s)
night,
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overall
lifestyle of their Add an article
the overall
children
in some cases. In the US, some provinces have imposed laws to restrict outdoor activities at Use synonyms
night
. In my opinion, having Use synonyms
a
certain limitations on teenagers after dark Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
have
a significant impact on their social Correct subject-verb agreement
has
life
and Use synonyms
decision making
skills.
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decision-making
First
and foremost reason, to be with Correct article usage
The first
parents
during Use synonyms
Use synonyms
night
, is Correct article usage
the night
safety
and parental care they provide. Correct article usage
the safety
The most
importantly, they know the outside world better and always be there to protect us from dangerous situations. Correct article usage
Most
For instance
, many people in their teenage often addict to alcohol or drugs without knowing the consequences. Linking Words
Due to
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this
, they have to suffer from Linking Words
longterm
illnesses and Correct your spelling
long-term
leaves
a lifetime regret of Correct subject-verb agreement
leave
disobeying
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for disobeying
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parents
.
Second and the most prominent reason is, Correct pronoun usage
their parents
at
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that at
this
particular age teenagers Linking Words
does
not have enough maturity to show responsibility and Correct subject-verb agreement
do
take
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make
decision
independently without being compelled by peers.
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decisions
For instance
, having a prolonged social Linking Words
life
can badly Use synonyms
effect
education and ultimately reduce academic Correct your spelling
affect
performace
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performance
at the end
. Linking Words
This
not only Linking Words
impact
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impacts
students
mental wellness Change noun form
students'
student's
due to
poor gradesLinking Words
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
creates a disturbance in Linking Words
personal
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their personal
life
.
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However
, Linking Words
children
paired with their Use synonyms
parents
during teenage, especially at Use synonyms
Use synonyms
night time
outing can strengthen their relationship and increase responsibility. Correct your spelling
nighttime
Moreover
, Linking Words
parents
often Use synonyms
acts
as mentors in decision making and limit us Change the verb form
act
making
wrong choices by showing Change preposition
from making
right
path. Add an article
the right
For example
, many Linking Words
children
who have Use synonyms
been
followed Unnecessary verb
apply
their
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in their
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parents
footsteps showed Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
an
incredible excellence in education and career development. So, having a curfew after Remove the article
apply
sometime
can be beneficial for Replace the word
some time
safer
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a safer
life
and being protected by Use synonyms
parents
is Use synonyms
also
equally necessary.
In conclusion, going out with Linking Words
parents
after a designated time at Use synonyms
night
has numerous benefits for the Use synonyms
children
to have Use synonyms
a
safe and pleasant outdoor activities. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
However
, imposing Linking Words
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
strickter
rules to limit their outdoor activities may Correct your spelling
stricter
leads
to negative outcomes Wrong verb form
lead
such
as loneliness and feeling restricted. In my opinion, having a balanced approach between freedom and curfew has more benefits for both society and teenagers.Linking Words
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