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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart compares data about how many people per million were born and died in Switzerland between 1970 and 2020.
Overall
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, it was important that the trend of
births
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 increased
while
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 the rate of deaths reduced over the period of half a century.
According to
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 the diagram, at the start,
Births
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, having the highest number in 1975, in Switzerland , hit 1.2;
then
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 it stabilized until 1985;
whereas
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, the number of deaths is more than
births
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. Later it rose overwhelmingly to 3 in 2015;
thereafter
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, it will climb marginally to 3.2 in 2025. The graph demonstrates that in the beginning, deaths scored 1 after that it leapt fractionally and touched the vertex at 1.5 in 1995.
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, its fashion was
in contrast
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 to the
Births
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 on account of the fact that it decreased somewhat to the same figure as in 1975. Later it will drop and reach the nadir of 0.8 in 2025.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words births with synonyms.
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