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The table below gives information about the average annual distance (in miles) travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1997 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the average annual distance (in miles) travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1997 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information on the average annual
distance
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traveled
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 by adults, measured in
miles
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, across various
travel
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modes
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 in 1997 and 2007. It is clear from the data that cars remained the dominant mode of transportation in both years,
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 motorcycles were the least used. Another notable trend is the increase in distances
traveled
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 by car, train, and taxi,
whereas
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 other
modes
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 experienced declines. In detail, cars were the most frequently used mode of transport, with the average annual
distance
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traveled
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 rising dramatically from 3,500
miles
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 in 1997 to 7,100
miles
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 in 2007. Train
travel
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also
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 saw a significant increase, climbing by 100
miles
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 to reach 1,000
miles
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 in 2007.
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, the average
distance
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 covered by taxis quadrupled, rising from 200
miles
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 in 1997 to 800
miles
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 in 2007, making it the third most utilized mode by the end of the period.
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, other
modes
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 of transport witnessed declines over the decade. Bus
travel
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 dropped notably, with the
distance
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 decreasing from 800
miles
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 in 1997 to 500
miles
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 in 2007. Walking
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 became less common, with the average
distance
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 falling from 400
miles
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 to 300
miles
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. Bicycle and motorcycle
travel
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 were the least significant
modes
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, with both starting at approximately 100
miles
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 in 1997 and experiencing slight decreases of 20
miles
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 and 10
miles
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, respectively, by 2007.
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, the data highlights a growing preference for cars, trains, and taxis,
while
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 traditional
modes
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 like walking, cycling, and buses became less popular over the ten-year period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, miles, travel, modes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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