The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012

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The graph illustrates the fluctuation of three different

types

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of crimes in Manchester city over the period of one decade, from 2023 to 2012. As a general trend, the three

types

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of felonies showed significant numbers just above 500

cases

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, these decreased around 2005,

where

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Burglary

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showed more reduction of 30% than Car Theft and

Robery

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Robbery

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, At the beginning of 2003,

Burglary

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showed a significant number of

cases

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, around 3,500

cases

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compared to the other

types

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, which were below 2,000

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. After 2004, most of them started to

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, with the exception of

Burglary

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which had a moderate growth, increasing from 3,500 to 3,800 reports.

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, the three

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of crimes assessed showed a significant fluctuation.

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, from 2008 to 2012, Cart Theft saw a dramatic increase, around 6,000

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more than

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in previous

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years.

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, both

Burglary

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and Robbery had a dramatic decrease, their numbers were just

bellow

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below

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2,500.

Finally

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Burglary

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, Car Theft and robbery showed a significant oscillation during the period studied.

However

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, car

thief

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thieves

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had the highest

reports

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number of reports

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in 2015.

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, the other two had a significant

dropped

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or remained slightly stable from 2003 to 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words types, cases, burglary with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 5 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

191 words

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