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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Kasiyet

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Kasiyet
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
shops
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 that started and stopped operating in a specific country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, the data clearly shows that the numbers for both newly opened and closed
shops
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 changed significantly over the given period.
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 the beginning, there were more
shops
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 opening than closing, but by the end of the period, the
number
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 of closures became higher. In 2011, nearly 8,500
shops
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 were opened,
while
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 fewer than 7,000 closed.
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, by 2012, the
number
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 of new
shops
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 dropped sharply to 4,000.
After
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this
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 decrease, the figure gradually increased, reaching 6,000 in 2014.
This
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number
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 remained constant for three years, after which it fell dramatically to 3,000 in 2018. Regarding shop closures, the
number
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 dropped significantly to below 1,000 in 2015.
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, it rose sharply the following year and remained steady at approximately 5,000 by 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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