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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the volume of tourists travelling to a selected Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
According to
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 the graph, we can see the percentage of visitors staying on cruise ships increased frequently. The
number
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 was about 0.25
million
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 in 2010,
then
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 it was increased to 0.5]
million
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 in 2011. The percentage had dropped to 0.25
million
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 in 2012. The
number
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 was growth fast from 2012 to 2017, it was an increase of 1.75
million
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 in 2017. The
number
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 was 2
million
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 in 2017.
In the
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The
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 graph about the
number
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 of visitors staying on
island
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the island
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,
it kept
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remained
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 unchanged between 2011 and 2010. the
number
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 was 0.75
million
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. After 2011, it
increase
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increased
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 to 1.5
million
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 in 2013. The
number
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 was stable from 2013 to 2015. The
number
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 was at the bottom in 2016, it was 1.25
million
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. It was back to 1.5
million
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 in 2017. About the total
number
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, we can see the
number
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was
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increased from 1
million
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 to 2.2
million
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 between 2010 and 2015. The
number
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had
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was
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 unchanged in 2016.
Then
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is
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it
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growth
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grew
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 to 3.5
million
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 in 2017. In conclusion, in the line
chart
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chart,
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 we can
know
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see that
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who were into staying on
island
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the island
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 was larger than the
number
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 of
people
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 who
are
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were
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 into staying on cruise ships, before 2016. After 2016,
people
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 are fond of staying on cruise ships. There were more
people
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enjoyed
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who enjoyed
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 visiting for a trip.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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