Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Every person faces certain difficulties during his or her life.
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failures, others try to fight back or turn the situation to their advantage.Linking Words
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we cannot achieve our goal.
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great
success in the end than they expected. Correct word choice
greater
For example
, if we look at the history of the world many famous Linking Words
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like leaders, famous writers, actors so on have faced many failures before achieving success. Despite these setbacks, they still managed to make a name for themselves years later. Even the famous actor Silver Stellon lived a difficult life before starting his acting career and was even forced to sell his beloved dog. Use synonyms
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reached the top of his work. He even mentioned in an interview that self-confidence and motivation are the main reasons that saved him from difficulties.
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On the other hand
, trying to get out of the current negative situation helps our personal development, Linking Words
strengthen
our character, and Correct subject-verb agreement
strengthens
increase
our self-confidence. Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
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demand their rights better. As an example, we can show the research of the famous New Times newspaper in 2029. It is specifically noted here that 23% of Use synonyms
people
who face difficulties become more self-confident.
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To sum up
, I think that improving the current negative situation leads us to a good result and helps us to form a strong personality within ourselves.Linking Words
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Task Achievement
While you give personal opinions and some examples, consider expanding on points with more detail to more fully address the topic.
General Language Use
Check the tense consistency and punctuation in your sentences, as it will help improve readability and precision.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your response well.
Task Achievement
You use relevant examples, such as the story of Silver Stallone, to illustrate your points effectively.
Your opinion
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