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Band 7.5

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Maria,

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Dear Maria, How are you ? you must be very excited about your trip to Vancouver; the city of dreams. I recently got your letter and I can say that you are quite anxious. All right, I am here to help. Talking about the most important thing, you have to find a place! I would have loved to have you at my dormitory but they don't allow it. Anyway, I will help you find a place within the budget you have. Now, you have to go to enjoy the 500 ft. roller coaster that they have in the downtown's famous amusement park 'Forero'.
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, don't you dare to miss the 'Gandola Ride' located in the east of the city!
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, do not forget that it is excruciating cold here. So, I suggest you bring some warm clothes. I reckon the boots that you were showing me
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 week would be great to have. Make sure to keep an eye on the weather forecast as it can suddenly get rainy and windy. Can't wait to see you. Do not forget to call me when you land. Cheers, Jass
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Consider adding more details about the places to visit, such as the type of attractions they are to make it more enticing for your friend.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the transitions between paragraphs are smoother for better coherence.
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The letter effectively covers all the required points: finding accommodation, suggesting activities, and advising on clothing.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and appropriate, setting a good tone for the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph is focused on a specific topic, contributing to a clear structure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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