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Nowadays, many people choose to work remotely from home instead of commuting to the office every day. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working from home?

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In recent days, most employees
choose
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have chosen
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 to
work
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 remotely from
home
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instead
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 of going to the office every day.
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Work
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Working
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 from
home
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 offers many advantages like flexible timing, eliminating travel expenses and
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet. It
also
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 has some disadvantages like
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle, lack of guidance from higher authorities and increased workload. On the one hand, working from
own
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your own
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 house is beneficial in reducing the cost of
travel
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a travel
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 routine and eating healthy cooked food. Workers
also
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 get enough time to spend quality time with
the
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their
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 family members.
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: Remote working plays
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in
healthy
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the healthy
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 state of employees both physically and mentally with the help of family members.
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, workload drastically
rise
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 in remote working because of
perks
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the perks
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 they
getting
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get
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. Most people need constant guidance and motivation for optimal performance but it lacks in
work
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 from
home
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.
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: People who
works
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work
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 from
home
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 always feel lazy and won't finish the
work
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 before
deadline
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the deadline
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. Even they face health issues
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of physical activity.
On
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In
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 conclusion, working remotely has many advantages like spending time with family, cutting commuting charges and eating nutritious foods but it
also
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 comes with disadvantages lack of guidance and
worload
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workload
 rise. Intermittent
work
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 from
home
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 and
work
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 from
office
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the office
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 is a great way for most people.

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task achievement
Provide clearer topic sentences in each paragraph, so the reader immediately understands the main point being discussed.
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Ensure each idea is fully developed - some points could be expanded with more details or examples for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Include a thesis statement in the introduction to clearly outline what the essay will cover.
coherence cohesion
Try using a more varied range of linking words or phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
task achievement
The essay clearly outlines both advantages and disadvantages of working from home, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of the essay is logical, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
The topic is relevant and current, which engages the reader effectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
  • commute
  • productivity
  • job satisfaction
  • talent pool
  • geographical diversity
  • cost savings
  • isolation
  • team cohesion
  • collaboration
  • overwork
  • burnout
  • financial benefits
  • environmental benefits
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