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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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Rubbish
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 is being produced nowadays by
people
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 trend is happening by
people
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 carelessly throwing away
waste
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 wherever
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 so should governments help prevent the
waste
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? In my opinion, yes.
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 with, our world is being filled up with
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 every single day.
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 can affect many of the wildlife out there
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 our planet and
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 us
people
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.
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, some
people
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 tend to throw their empty bottles and generally
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waste
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 into the ocean.
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 can affect many sea animals out there, which causes them death eventually as bottles are a plastic substance, which dissolves slowly in the ocean.
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, burning
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 releases toxic gas, which can not only affect animals
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 but
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people
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too
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, the
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 can affect
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climate change too. Since
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,
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 burning
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releases
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 Carbon Dioxide (CO2) and other pollutants
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 the atmosphere. One way to overcome those issues is
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 education, specifically targeting these issues which inform the public about
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, we can gather loads of
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 and establish
a community campaigns
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a community campaign
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, through which residents can gain a deeper understanding
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 the causes of
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. Once residents have gained a deeper understanding
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, they will stop throwing
rubbish
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 around. In conclusion, the problem of more
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 spreading around is because
people
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 are not aware of what they are doing.
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 is why community campaigns would be a good option to reduce the spread of
rubbish
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 around since we can give a deeper understanding of our behaviour.

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task achievement
Try to expand on the specific steps governments can take to reduce rubbish. This will strengthen your task response by showing a complete exploration of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between all paragraphs for better coherence and cohesion. A clear and logical flow from one idea to another will enhance the readability of your essay.
introduction conclusion
The introduction effectively sets up the topic and your opinion, providing a clear starting point for the discussion.
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The essay includes relevant examples, like mentioning plastic bottles affecting marine life, which helps underline the points made.
introduction conclusion
The conclusion neatly summarizes the essay and reinforces the importance of educating the public.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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