Successful ports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is not fair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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the observers.
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wage
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task achievement
Ensure your arguments are well-developed and clearly supported with specific examples to strengthen your essay. Consider including examples such as famous sports players and their earnings compared to professionals in other roles.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on improving the clarity of your ideas by organizing your thoughts into distinct paragraphs with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You have addressed both views on the topic and provided your own opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both viewpoints, and a conclusion offering your opinion.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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