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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 some
people
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 argue that contemporary houses should be constructed in the same
style
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 as houses built in the past in local areas, others believe that residents should have a choice in deciding what
style
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 to choose. In my opinion,
people
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 should be allowed to decide what types of styles are to be used when constructing a building. The most compelling argument in
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 of those who believe that the
style
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 of homes should stay the same is the reluctance of anything new.
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 opinion might especially concern the older generation who have a traditional way of thinking and things they like. If the government is to build buildings using the contemporary
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,
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 of
people
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 might be violated and at unrest because they want to conserve the
style
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 used on older houses.
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, in Norway, more and more cities are becoming modern which affects
people
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’s attitude towards the government.
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, authorities should make it possible for a variation of styles used when erecting a house. The argument in
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 of
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 statement is that by enabling
people
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 to express themselves by choosing what
style
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 is to be used, the city will become full of different types of infrastructure which can attract visitors from around the world.
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, by allowing
people
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 to choose
the
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 building
style
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 of their own, the city will become less dull as it might be interpreted as daunting if it
filled
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 with the same building styles.
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, even though some
people
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 might be against enabling the authorities
choose
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 the building
style
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, from my
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 it might be beneficial to the city’s prospects in terms of attracting visitors from all over the world.
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example
Ensure specific examples fully align with your arguments. Consider elaborating on them to provide more clarity.
task
To enhance task achievement, clearly explain all points of view before providing your opinion.
coherence
Link each idea and paragraph logically to improve clarity and flow. Use more transitional words or phrases.
introduction conclusion
The essay introduces and concludes the topic effectively, providing a clear opinion.
support
Main points are generally well-supported and discussed logically.
persuasiveness
The argument for allowing varied house styles is persuasive and provides a forward-looking perspective.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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