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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedon, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedon, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates typical
emissions
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 of carbon dioxide (CO2) for each individual in three countries the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between
from
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1967 to 2007.
Unit
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 measured is
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. On the whole, the amount
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of outputs
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outputs
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 of both Portugal and Italy increased over the given time
period
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.
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,
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 and the
UK
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UK's
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emissions
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 showed
gradual
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a gradual
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 decline from 1967 to 2007.
Portugal
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Portugal's
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emissions
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 were lower than two
tonnes
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in
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 the beginning of the
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 and
it
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they
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 kept rising
throughout
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until recorded at 5
tonnes
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at
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in
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the
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2007,
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similarly
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 Italy started the recorded
period
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 at just over 4
tonnes
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 and increased slightly to around 7.5
tonnes
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 in 1997.
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 it showed a steady trend until 2007.
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, Sweden showed an increase from 1967 to 1977 from just over 8
tonnes
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 to around 10
tonnes
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,
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 started fell down to 4.5
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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 UK
emissions
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 kept
fallen
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falling
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 in the same given
period
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 from just over 10
tonnes
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 to 8.5
tonnes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, tonnes, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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