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The following table shows the number of people from 5 European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.x

The following table shows the number of people from 5 European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.x
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The following table provides information on the number of citizens from five European
countries
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 living abroad in each other's
countries
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 in 2011. These
countries
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 are Britain,
Germany
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, Italy, Poland, and Spain and
these
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 essay will describe the distribution of
expatriates
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 among these nations.
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,
Germany
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 hosted the highest number of
foreignnationals
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foreign nationals
,
while
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 Poland recorded the smallest foreign population. British citizens were the most represented among
expatriates
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,
while
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 Polish citizens were the least represented.
Germany
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 had the largest foreign population, particularly Poles (426,000) and Italians (556,000).
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, Britain was a popular destination, hosting 550,000 Poles and 297,000
Germans
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. Spain
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 attracted many
expatriates
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, especially British nationals (391,000) and
Germans
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(196,000). These figures emphasize the preference for economically strong nations like
Germany
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 and Britain among migrants.
On the other hand
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, Poland hosted only a negligible number of foreigners, with the largest group being
Germans
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 (4,400). Italy's foreign population was
also
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 modest, with 42,000
Germans
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 and 106,000 Poles making up the majority of its
expatriates
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. Both
countries
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 seemed less appealing rather than their
neighbors
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neighbours
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, expatriates, germans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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