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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people claim that some
individuals
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 should be obligated to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they study,
while
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 others argue that they can freely choose other
countries
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. In my opinion, I contend that allowing people to opt for other
countries
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 where they want to
work
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 will bring more benefits for them, as they will have more chances to gain new experience.
Individuals
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 can contribute to the
country
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’s development if they are required to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they study. They will have a sense of responsibility to respect other people and communities who support them during the training by making more positive impacts on the
country
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.
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, my teacher, who is an expert in
agriculture
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 field and has completed his studies in Indonesia, has been making numerous contributions to the
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,
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 as providing farmers with new machines and effective methods by altering the seeds and soils, in order to boost crop production.
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, if working in a
country
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 where they study is mandatory, the
country
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 will obtain more benefits from them, as they fully give their contributions.
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,
individuals
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 can have more opportunities to learn and gain vast knowledge by working in other areas.
This
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 enables them to delve into some aspects that they are unable to learn since those aspects are only available in some particular
countries
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, which increases their capability and understanding. One renowned doctor from China,
for example
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, has moved to the U.S. to do
further
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 research about rare diseases where he can acquire more valuable resources and subjects, which are related to his field.
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, the more freedom they have to
work
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 in other
countries
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, the more opportunities they can obtain, which is why allowing them to
work
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 in other places is a viable option.
To conclude
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, I consider that
individuals
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 can significantly improve
as well as
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 make impacts widely by having
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 option to
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 in other
countries
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.
Nevertheless
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, if they stay in one
country
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, they can give more profound outcomes to it.

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task
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structure
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task
Your essay includes specific examples that support your points effectively, illustrating your ideas well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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