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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information about the annual
milk
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 production in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Australia, Tanzania, and
Guatemala
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 over the
period
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 span of
thirty-years
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thirty years
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, commencing from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 produced the highest
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number of liters
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liters
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litres
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 of
milk
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 , followed by Australia. Meanwhile, Tanzania and
Guatemala
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 exhibited a
considerable
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considerably
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 increased amount of
milk
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 throughout the given
period
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. Netherlands
milk
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 production began at 11, 262,000 in 1990;
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this
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 declined after ten years it managed to
surged
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at
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to
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 11, 466,00 in 2010. Meanwhile, Australia manufactured 11, 246, 000
liters
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 of
milk
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 in 1990 and moderately declined after twenty years to 9, 165,000.
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, the
amount
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number
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 of
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liters
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litres
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 produced by Tanzania and
Guatemala
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 exhibited a gradual
increased
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increase
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 in the given time
period
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. At the start of the
period
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,
Tanzanian
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Tanzanians
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 manufactured 87, 000
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liters
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litres
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 of
milk
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,
gradually
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which gradually
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increased
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increasing
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 in 2000 and 2010 to 1,055,000.
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,
Guatemala
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 produced 26,000
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liters
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litres
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 in 1990,
increased
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which increased
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 in 2000
at
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to
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 55,000 and 84, 000 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, guatemala, period, liters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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