The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.
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The given pie charts depict the outcome of a study into the population of many free time activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.
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, it is illustrated that people were not introduced to computer games in 1985,
while
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in 1995, it was played by 27% of the European adults. Regarding watching TV, it can be observed from the chart that the ratio of people participating in
this
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activity remained approximately equal from 1985 till 1995, with 30%. In 1985, almost 41% of people liked to talk with family and eat out which had dropped by 26% in ten years.
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, around 21% of European
men's
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men
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talk
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talked
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with their
family
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families
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in the
year
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1985.
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, it has increased by 5% in ten years. There was no reading of playing computer games in the initial
year
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of the chart.
However
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, it was 27% in the
year
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1995 which was the second highest number of that
year
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.
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