It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or aisagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Learning how to differentiate ethical behaviour should be a priority for parents when raising their
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matter. I do agree about punishment as a way to let kids understand the consequences of their actions, Linking Words
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, I will never support any form of violence.
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, create a meaningful discussion on what behaviour is tolerable and what is not. Linking Words
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