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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information and consumer spending on different items in 5 regions in 2002.
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, the food -drink-
tobacco
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and tobacco
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is
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are
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 the highest
within
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among
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two
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the two
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 charts, showing expenditures on these items
more
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are more
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 attractive to citizens.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 entertainment and education
was
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were
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 not paid attention to because the percentage was very low. The beginning is food , beverages and tobacco had 5
countries
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 spent on the most in the top in categories Turkey was the first position and spent higher among 5
countries
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.
Second
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 position was
the
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Ireland at approximately 28%. And the rate of
3
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the 3
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remaining
countries
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 namely Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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and Sweden
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 was all under 18%.
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it is fashion items and footwear, the expenses of 3
countries
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was
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 about 6,5% . Citizens in Italy spent generously
for
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on
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 these, up to 9%. Sweden was the lowest in the table
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because
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 it was 5.4% . The final category is leisure and education . The rate of the column was very low the majority spent under 5% and negligible.
4countries
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4 countries
 respectively Ireland, Italy ,
spain
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Spain
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 and
sweden
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Sweden
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 had
equal
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 rate at about 3%
while
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the
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turkey was the highest.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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