Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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on their families. Because revealing their personal lives can expose them to Linking Words
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, Princess Diana was killed was partly caused by the paparazzi who followed her car, and shared her pictures publicly without her consent.
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Task Response
Ensure all parts of the question are fully addressed. The essay predominantly discusses why details should not be published but could expand more on the opposing viewpoint to address it comprehensively.
Task Response
Work on some grammatical and punctuation improvements such as "share" instead of "shared" and watch the pluralization to enhance clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Broaden the range of transitional phrases used between sentences and paragraphs to make ideas flow more naturally.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, maintaining focus on the central argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph is centered around a main idea, and the points are logically sequenced.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite