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Band 7.5

You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. Write a letter to the library. Explain what has happened and tell them what you want to do about it. You should You do NOT need to write your own address.

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I am Payal Khandelwal from the first year BE class in your college and writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I could not
return
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books
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 that I
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borrowed from a library in time. First of all, I have borrowed 4
books
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 from the library on the
last
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 Friday and the due date for
return
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 is on the 14th March. But ,I would not be able to
return
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 the
books
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 on that day as I am not in the town.Actually,my aunt fell down in the washroom on Saturday and being an emergency contact number received a call from the hospital that she was in serious condition. Because of
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 ,I travelled to her place urgently.Earlier, I thought I would be able to
return
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 back soon but the doctor suggested that my aunt would need 24-hour support for at least the next 10 days .
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,I understand your concern about the
books
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 so need to check if my friends could
return
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 these
books
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 on my behalf and would
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 like to pay if any fine has been incurred . Sorry for the inconvenience. Yours Sincerely, Payal

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent paragraph structure. Each main point or idea should ideally have its own paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the letter flows logically by perhaps adding transitional words such as 'Additionally' or 'Moreover' to connect thoughts more smoothly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate for a formal letter to the library.
Task Achievement
The tone is suitable for the context, and the letter clearly explains the situation and proposes a solution.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unfortunately
  • urgent situation
  • due date
  • extenuating circumstances
  • extension
  • late fees
  • return date
  • resolve
  • inconvenience
  • borrowed
  • authors
  • empathetic
  • propose
  • alternative solution
  • arrangement
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