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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph indicates the amount of accommodation cost compared by three different countries between 1997 and 2014.
Overall
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,
country
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 A has extremely high payments;
while
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the value in
country
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B
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 is not as fixed as others.
However
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, the
country
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 which has most lowest price is
country
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C
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 when weighed up with the other countries.
To begin
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 with, in 1999 and 2000the accommodation in
country
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B
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 was more expensive than in countries A and
C
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 which is around 250k even in the start period
country
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 A had a budget of about 150k which is
further
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 than the others;
nevertheless
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,
country
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C
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 was still lower than A and
B
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 which is only 150K same as the beginning.
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, in 2003
country
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 A had the biggest total briefly more than 500k; meanwhile, the cost of
country
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B
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 rose by approximately 270K contrast
country
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C
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 still remained at the same figure.
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, in 2008 the average house price in
country
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C
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 dropped by more than the year before which was close to 50k;
in addition
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,
country
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B
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also
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 fell to 250k, though only
country
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 A had an increased rate.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, c, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average house prices
  • significant trend
  • fluctuations
  • comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • steady period
  • economic factors
  • political factors
  • historical context
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • noticeable fluctuations
  • major changes
  • given period
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