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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph indicates the amount of accommodation cost compared by three different countries between 1997 and 2014.
Overall
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,
country
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 A has extremely high payments;
while
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the value in
country
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B
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 is not as fixed as others.
However
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, the
country
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 which has most lowest price is
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C
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 when weighed up with the other countries.
To begin
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 with, in 1999 and 2000the accommodation in
country
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B
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 was more expensive than in countries A and
C
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 which is around 250k even in the start period
country
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 A had a budget of about 150k which is
further
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 than the others;
nevertheless
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,
country
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C
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 was still lower than A and
B
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 which is only 150K same as the beginning.
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, in 2003
country
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 A had the biggest total briefly more than 500k; meanwhile, the cost of
country
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B
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 rose by approximately 270K contrast
country
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C
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 still remained at the same figure.
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, in 2008 the average house price in
country
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C
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 dropped by more than the year before which was close to 50k;
in addition
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,
country
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B
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also
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 fell to 250k, though only
country
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 A had an increased rate.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, c, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average house prices
  • significant trend
  • fluctuations
  • comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • steady period
  • economic factors
  • political factors
  • historical context
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • noticeable fluctuations
  • major changes
  • given period
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