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The table below provides statistics on several major metro(MRT) system aroun dthe world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below provides statistics on several major metro(MRT) system aroun dthe world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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London
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 experienced an upward trend in total
length
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while
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Kyoto
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 showed a downward trend.
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Tokyo
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 was the highest segment in carrying capacity, but
Kyoto
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 made up the lowest part. If we compare
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London
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 and
Kyoto
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, we notice that
London
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 accounted for 1100
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 in
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Kyoto
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 was around 594
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London
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 made up 548
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 in carrying capacity
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Kyoto
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 compromised around 11
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Tokyo
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 and Los Angeles it can be deduced that
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 contributed 149
km
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 in
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, Los Angeles contributed around 14
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Tokyo
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 made up to 1434
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 per year at carrying quantity
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 Los Angeles amounted to 90
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 every year.
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, Washington DC accounted for 114
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 Paris had the largest share in carrying capacity
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about 850
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while
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 Washington DC was only about 70
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, length, kyoto, tokyo, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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