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Band 2.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

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The two maps illustrate a
harbour
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 in 2000 and how it appears now.
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, it can be seen that the new
harbour
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 has more facilities than its previous version, with
introduction
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 of cafes, shops, and a new hotel. There is a new branch from the main road that
guide
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 passengers to a new car park. So the current map has two parking sites and each one has showers and toilets near them. One of the interesting changes
,
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 is the construction of new cafes and shops which are located along the sea beside the
life boat
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lifeboat
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. There used to be a disused castle on the south-east of the
harbour
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. Now, it is refurbished and transferred to a hotel. The public beach near the previous castle
,
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 has turned
to
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 a private one
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 its ownership is for the hotel. They have changed the marina’s place with the fishing boat’s site so private yachts
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 more space now. There used to be two passenger ferries at the
harbour
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. So another notable change is the building of a new dock and adding the third ferry.
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introduction conclusion
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clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure that every point made about the transformations is clear and comprehensively articulated. Some parts of the essay could benefit from further elaboration.
relevant specific examples
The essay describes specific changes, such as new cafes and shops along the sea, as well as the construction and refurbishment of buildings, showing good grasp of details.
logical structure
The essay is well-organized, with paragraphs logically following the changes over time, demonstrating a sound logical structure.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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