The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart illustrates figures about how families spent their weekly
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in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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there was an upward trend in housing, transport and leisure.
In contrast
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, a downward trend is observed in
food
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, fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
and
persoanl
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personal
goods. Turning to the graph
more
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detail, the
proportion
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of
food
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in 1968 was the highest figure
while
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the
proportion
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food
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of food
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in 2018 was second order.
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, the gap
of
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in
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food
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between
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1968 and
in
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2018 was the largest
about
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35%. It is noticeable that the
proportion
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of leisure
clibed
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climbed
significantly, reaching 22%.
In addition
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, the figures
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housing and transport rose to 18% and 14% each. Meanwhile, the
proportion
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of clothing and
footware
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footwear
dropped from 10% to 5%.
Moreover
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, the figures
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fuel and power and personal goods decreased.
However
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, the
proportion
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of household goods was not variations with still 8%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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