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Band 6.5

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre to save money. Write a letter to your council. In your letter -Give details on how you and your family use the centre. -explain why the centre is important for the local community. -describe the potential effects on local people if the centre closes.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to you in relation to the closure of the sports and leisure
centre
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. It is unfortunate that you have decided to close it as my family and I have been using it for more than five years. Every weekend, we will go
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centre
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 to play tennis and use all the facilities they have. It is the best
centre
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 we have in our area as it has a swimming pool, a
suana
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sauna
 and many
sport
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 facilities
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 as a soccer field and a tennis court. Other than the sport that I mentioned, we often just hang out with friends as there is a cafe there.
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centre
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 has always been important to the residents as it is the only place where they can get active since there are no parks or
garden
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 in the area. If the
centre
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close
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, the people will be devastated since
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centre
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 has been around for 20 years. I literally grew up going there.
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 means I will lose a portion of my childhood and the happy memories of being there. I would kindly ask you to reconsider closing the
centre
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 as it has a special place in our local community. Kind regards, Joscelin

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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing the paragraphs to focus more clearly on each main idea.
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Try to elaborate slightly more on the community benefits and consequences of closure to strengthen the task response.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear greeting and closing, which adds to its coherence.
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The tone is polite and formal, suitable for a letter to the council.
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The letter addresses all elements of the task with relevant details about personal and community use of the centre.
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