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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
#information #families #country #income
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The chart presents information about how households in a certain country allocated
its
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their
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 weekly earnings in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the chart gives statistics related to relatives spending once a week between 1968 and 2018. In 1968 , food was the highest spending with about 35
percent
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per cent
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 and in 2018 it decreased dramatically
with
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to
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 approximately 17
percentage
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per cent
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. Housing expenses in 1968
was
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were
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 nearly 10% and
it
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they
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 increased up to 20 percent. Fuel and power payments
was
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were
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 7% in 1968 and
then
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 went down close up to 4% in 2018. In 1968 closing and footwear was 10% in the beginning,
then
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 in
2018
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2018,
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 it slummed to 5%.
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, between 1969 and 2018 , household goods stayed without changes
with
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at
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 nearly 7%. In 1986, personal goods was around 8 percent and it went down to 4% in 2018. Transport spending was approximately 8% in 1968 and it increased steadily to 14% in 2008. Leisure expenditures in 1968
was
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were
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 nearly 9% and
it
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they
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 boosted
in
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apply
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to 23%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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