Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?
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as buying materialistic things like expensive clothes, cars and houses which gives them a sense of satisfaction and happiness. Linking Words
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as a Gucci bag, she feels happy.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Strengthen the logical structure by making smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas.
Task Achievement
Ensure that all ideas are fully elaborated on, providing more detail and depth to arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction that outlines the topic and your position, and it concludes with a summary of the main points.
Task Achievement
The use of specific examples, such as the Gucci bag and family love, effectively illustrates the points made in each paragraph.
Task Achievement
The essay responds fully to the prompt, discussing both the role of money and other sources of happiness.
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