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In many countries today, crime novels and tv crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think there books and tv shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and tv crime dramas?

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Nowadays, majority of the countries are adopting
crime
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 scenes to attract
the
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audiences via
tv
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TV
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 dramas or
by
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books. And, I believe these shows,
dramas
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and dramas
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 are
gainining
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gaining
 popularity because most of the acts are based on
real life
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 scenarios. In
this
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the reason for its popularity and will present my opinion on
these kind
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 of genres of series and
movies
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. One of the
reason
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crime
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 genres are getting more recognition
is
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in
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 today's society because most of the acts are based on
an
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actual
real life
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 events. What I meant by
that is
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,
the
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tv
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TV
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production
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productions
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 are creating the stories that are taking place in
the
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society.
This
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 creates a sense of
self awareness
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on
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 the public and warns them from being a victim of
bulgars
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 and
vendalism
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vandalism
.
For example
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: there are
tv
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TV
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 shows like
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crime patrol
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Crime Patrol
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 that
narrates
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narrate
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 different
crime
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 stories that actually take place in our community. In today's busy world, we tend to underestimate the small events that later
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is
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in
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 dreadful consequences. Perhaps, these
kind
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 of
crime
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 dramas and novels are
awarding
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appealing to
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 the public to be more cautious about their surroundings. In my opinion, the recognition
crime
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 genres are getting in the entertainment field
gas
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has
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 both positive and negative
impact
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impacts
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. One of the negative
effect
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effects
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 is
while
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 it is teaching
people
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 to be more cautious, it is
also
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 negatively showing the public different sides of
crime
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 techniques. They are learning tactics
on
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 home invasion,
murder
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and murder
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 plots. Recently a news surfaced on the internet that
went
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 controversial. A 26
years
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 old male was charged with
1st degree
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1st-degree
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 murder of an old man
while
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 attempting robbery despite
of
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being the house highly secured by the cameras from one of the
crime
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movies
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.
Although
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these kind
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 of
movies
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 are made with good intentions and
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the
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people
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, sometimes
it
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counteracts
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 too and might attract
people
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 with bad intentions.
To conclude
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, there is no doubt that
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the
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crime
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movies
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 have motivated
people
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 to be
self aware
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self-aware
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of
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on
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 their surroundings but at the same time
it
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they
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also
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has
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have
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 created a threat against
people
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 on how some individuals with bad intentions are learning ways to utilize it against them. Regardless
to say
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,
there
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these
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movies
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 have both advantages and disadvantages
on
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public
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the public
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task achievement
Try to develop your main points further by adding more examples and explanations. This will enhance the depth of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea of the paragraph. This will help in enhancing the logical flow of the essay.
task achievement
Try to use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures to enrich your writing. This will make your essay more engaging and impressive.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic directly and presents both reasons for the popularity of crime fiction and personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion clearly frame the argument of the essay.
task achievement
The essay includes specific examples such as the mention of the TV show "Crime Patrol," which helps illustrate the points made.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • intrigue
  • enigma
  • compelling
  • addictive
  • chilling
  • forensics
  • procedural
  • thriller
  • suspense
  • psychological
  • criminalistics
  • deviant
  • intricate
  • red herrings
  • misdirection
  • sardonically
  • socioeconomic
  • catharsis
  • moral ambiguity
  • multidimensional
  • protagonist
  • antagonist
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