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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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It is argued that countries should prioritize producing
food
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 domestically for their populations and minimize reliance on
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 imports.
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this
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 viewpoint holds merit in promoting self-sufficiency, I contend that complete autonomy in
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 cuisine is unfeasible.
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 with, numerous nations face inherent challenges that impede their ability to meet local
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 demands independently. Factors
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 as inadequate irrigation systems, infertile soil conditions, limited technological advancements and complex political climates can hinder sufficient
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 cultivation.
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, North Korea annually imports half of its total
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 consumption to avert famine and malnutrition among its populace. Relying solely on domestic production would exacerbate
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 shortages, which heavily affect adolescents’ growth and well-being.
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, Libya’s predominantly desert terrain restricts farming activities.
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, the state of Libya has to import
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 to sustain societal stability and prevent resorting to criminals to acquire
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.
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, international trade plays a pivotal role in global economic development by facilitating resource distribution. A case in point is that Longan is a special fruit, which is rich in various vitamins and abundant in southern China, but its production always exceeds local demand. By exporting
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 fruit to regions deficient in essential nutrients,
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 as South Africa and Egypt, not only can public health be enhanced through improved dietary diversity, but
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 the livelihoods of Chinese farmers can prosper, simultaneously reducing resource wastage and fostering economic growth. In conclusion,
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 advocating self-sufficiency in
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 production is commendable, the intricate realities of global agriculture systems make complete independence unattainable. Embracing importing
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 as a complementary measure not only addresses domestic shortages
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 fosters economic prosperity and resource optimization on a global scale.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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