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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. lisa

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In recent years,
graffities
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graffiti
 are popular among
people
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 in the world. Some feel that cities should provide the spaces for them
however
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 others think that
this
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kind
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 of
art
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 should not be allowed. In my opinion,
graffiti
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 is
a
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 interesting
art
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 that could be enjoyed by
people
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 who live and visit the
city
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. Somehow, it could make the cities
be
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more beautiful and attract tourists. On the one hand,
graffiti
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 is a
kind
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 of
art
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 that
could
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can
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 be seen by many
people
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 in the
neighborhood
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. Many
artists
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 are talented
to make
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in making
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ones
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one
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. The walls for
graffiti
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 are like canvases for the painters. The process itself could be an opportunity for them to meet each other and share their ideas. Some
artists
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 do not have
a
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previlege
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privilege
 to show their works in an exhibition. So, by providing
the the
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spaces for
graffiti
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,
government
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the government
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 can show
supports
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support
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 for them. With a theme
that
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decided by them, the
artists
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 could express their inspiration and make the
city
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be
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more attractive.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think that
this
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kind
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 of
art
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 could make the
city
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 messier. The fact that some
people
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ilegally
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illegally
 draw the walls in the
city
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 in
not
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appropriate
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inappropriate
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 ways,
make
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makes
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 them believe that
graffiti
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 should be banned. Without any
kind
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 of drawings on the
city
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 wall, it will
looks
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 neater and cleaner. These
people
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also
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 think that
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this
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these kinds
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kind
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 of projects are draining a lot of the
city
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's budget that could be used for more important ones.
To conclude
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,
graffiti
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 in the
city
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 is a
kind
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 of
art
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 that could be enjoyed by many
people
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 and make it
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more
beautifull
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beautiful
 and attractive. On top of that, it can empower the local
artists
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 to demonstrate their sense of
art
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 without limitation.
However
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, not all
of
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the
people
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 have same thoughts.
Finally
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,
government
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the government
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 part is important to design the theme of the
graffiti
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 so it would not look bad.

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Try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to ensure smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
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Illustrate points with more specific examples to strengthen arguments and improve relevance.
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The essay presents a balanced discussion of both views related to the topic of graffiti.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are provided, which frame the response well.
task achievement
Effective attempt to discuss both perspectives of the issue, providing a well-rounded argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artistic expression
  • beautify
  • rebellion
  • freedom of speech
  • tourism
  • economy
  • clean and professional image
  • vandalism
  • crime rates
  • negative perception
  • private property rights
  • maintenance costs
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