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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantges?

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, buses, and trucks Will no
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people
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 to drive them in the future and these vehicles will only carry passengers
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 travelling. I believe
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 is a significant improvement in the transportation system
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 the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because haw
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 can trust
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 improvement in their lives? Driverless
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 are a huge development in the future
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 will be travelling with their families in comfort way without worrying about who will drive the car.
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 must not rely heavily on
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 technology which may come with issues when they
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 for customers.
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 and may cause accidents they lose
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control of the car.
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, the drawbacks are much greater
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 a lack of safety and I don’t think
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 should trust these vehicles.
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the passengers will lose control over the car and will cause an accident and may the travels horrific injuries or even death. For these reasons, I should recommend
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 to be cation using these kinds of
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 and not putting their families in danger. In conclusion,
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luxury, the negatives are highly greater because may
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 a true disaster for those who own them.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your arguments are clearly organized and structured. Try to maintain a logical flow in your essay to help the reader understand your position more clearly.
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Work on balancing your essay to ensure both advantages and disadvantages are explored equally and thoroughly. Providing more detailed examples can strengthen your argument.
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Ensure your ideas are clearly and comprehensively presented. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, supported with relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively highlight your main position, setting a good framework for your essay.
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You have a clear understanding of the topic and attempt to address both sides of the debate effectively.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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